Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The graph illustrates, information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia from the year 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that Film club has remained the highest number of participants over the 20 year period. Meanwhile the Amateur dramatics became the lowest participants club in the year 2020.
The Film club participants dipped slightly in the first 10 years however the number of participants rose back to 65 in the year 2020.
Similarly, the number of Martial arts members fell twice in the year 2005 and 2015 with a year gap , while it increased in the year 2010 and 2020 then adjusted into a 45 members. In addition the table tennis participants edged up in the year 2005 and fluctuated. After 2010 it had rocketed, and the participants turned into more than 50 in the year 2020.
The Musical performance club opened in 2005, and it climbed up for the year. Compared to that Amateur dramatics club increased slightly in the year 2005 then decreased significantly through 2005 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for the various activities. You have successfully identified the highest and lowest participants and noted significant changes over the period. However, the report could be improved by providing more precise data points to support your descriptions. For example, when you mention that the Film club 'dipped slightly', including the specific figures would make your analysis more professional. Additionally, ensure that all comparisons are clearly linked to the data provided to avoid vague descriptions. Overall, you have addressed the task requirements well.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific trends. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Meanwhile', 'Similarly', and 'In addition' to connect your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel abrupt. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data. The referencing is generally clear, but the structure of the final paragraph could be more cohesive.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your meaning, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'rocketed', and 'significantly'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'adjusted into a 45 members' is not natural English, and 'the lowest participants club' should be 'the club with the fewest participants'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that your vocabulary choices are appropriate for a formal report. While your vocabulary is adequate for the task, it lacks the precision required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. For instance, 'The Film club has remained the highest number of participants' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'The Film club has maintained the highest number of participants'. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'in the year 2005 and 2015 with a year gap'. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and refining your use of prepositions will help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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