Band 8.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 8.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 8.0)
The graph demonstrates the number of people in Melbourne, Australia who participated in five different activities - Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table Tennis, Musical performances - at one social centre between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the Film club consistently recorded the maximum participation throughout the 20-year period. Participation kept on increasing for Table Tennis and musical performances. While Martial arts activity showed relatively stable participants, amateur dramatics experienced a decline.
Regarding the Film club, the participation remained highest among all the five activities, fluctuating between 60 and 70 people throughout the period. Although participation in musical performances remained at zero until 2005, it experienced a steady rise afterward and by year 2015, it overtook the amateur dramatics in terms of participation. Additionally, Table tennis followed the same trend and showed a stepped increase in year 2010 and contributed more than 50 participants by year 2020.
However, Martial arts activity portrayed minimum fluctuation between year 2000 and 2020. Finally, Amateur dramtics experienced a drop starting in 2005, eventually plummenting to fewer than 10 participant by the end of the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 8.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 8.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 7.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 8.0 |
| Overall | 8.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 8.0
The response effectively addresses the task by identifying the main trends and providing relevant comparisons. You have clearly highlighted the dominant position of the Film club and the contrasting trends of the other activities, such as the growth in Table Tennis and the decline in Amateur dramatics. The overview is clear and sets the tone for the rest of the report. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points mentioned are accurate; for instance, ensure the distinction between 'stepped increase' and actual data trends is precise. Overall, the information is well-selected and covers all key features of the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 8.5
The essay is logically organized, with a clear introduction, a concise overview, and two body paragraphs that group the information effectively. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Regarding', 'Although', 'Additionally', and 'However' helps to guide the reader through the data. The progression of ideas is smooth, moving from the most prominent activity to the others. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different categories of activities. The flow is natural, and the relationship between the different activities is clearly established throughout the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 7.5
You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, using terms like 'consistently recorded', 'plummeting', and 'stepped increase' to describe the data trends. There are a few minor spelling errors, such as 'Amateur dramtics' and 'plummenting', which are minor slips rather than systematic issues. The vocabulary is generally precise and appropriate for an academic report. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'participation' or 'activities' to avoid repetition, although the current range is sufficient to convey the information clearly and accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 8.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. Most sentences are error-free, and the grammar is generally accurate. There are occasional minor slips, such as 'fewer than 10 participant' (should be plural 'participants') and 'in year 2010' (usually 'in 2010'). However, these errors do not impede communication. The control over punctuation and sentence structure is strong, allowing for a clear and professional presentation of the data. The use of complex structures, such as the 'While...' and 'Although...' clauses, adds variety to the writing.
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