Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The graph illustrates, information on the numbers of participants for different activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia from the year 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that the Film club has remained the highest number of participants over the 20 year period. Meanwhile the Amateur dramatics became the least popular club in the year 2020.
The Film club participants dipped slightly in the first 10 years; the number of participants rose back to 65 in the year 2020.
Similarly, the number of Martial arts members fell twice in the year 2005 and 2015 with a year gap; while it increased in the year 2010 and 2020 then adjusted to a 45 members. In addition the table tennis participants edged up in the year 2005 and fluctuated. After 2010 it had risen, and the participants turned into more than 50 in the year 2020.
The Musical performance club opened in 2005, and it climbed up for the year. Compared to that Amateur dramatics club increased slightly in the year 2005 then decreased significantly from 2005 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have successfully identified the main features and trends of the graph. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with data from the chart. However, your description of the data is occasionally imprecise. For example, stating that Martial arts 'adjusted to a 45 members' is slightly awkward, and describing the Film club as having 'remained the highest number' is grammatically incorrect (it should be 'remained the most popular'). To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with greater precision and that you consistently compare the activities rather than just listing them individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Meanwhile', 'Similarly', and 'In addition' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more balanced. The transition between the description of the Martial arts and Table tennis is a bit abrupt. Using a wider variety of linking phrases and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would improve the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your meaning, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'dipped', and 'climbed up'. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation. For instance, 'remained the highest number of participants' is not standard English; it would be better to say 'maintained the highest number of participants'. Additionally, 'turned into more than 50' is an unnatural way to describe numerical growth. Focusing on more precise collocations related to data description will help you demonstrate a more flexible and accurate range of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'The Film club has remained the highest number' (missing a verb or using the wrong structure) and 'adjusted to a 45 members' (incorrect article usage). There are also minor punctuation issues, such as the unnecessary comma after 'illustrates' in the first sentence. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles with numerical data. Your control of grammar is generally sufficient for communication but lacks the consistency required for a higher band.
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