Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The line graph illustrates the information that how many numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in two different two countries, Melbourne, and Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it can be seen that the film club had the highest number of participants over the period, whereas musical performance attracted the fewest participants.
To begin with, the proportion of participants in the film club was approximately 65 in 2000. It then decreased slightly to around 60 in 2010 before rising steadily about 65 in 2015, and reached at 67 by 2020. Moreover, the number of participants in the martial arts stood 37 in 2000, and then seen continuously fluctuations and around 35 shown in 2020.
Probing further, the amateur dramatics attracted about 25 participants in 2000, and increased slightly to around 28 in 2005. However, the figure declined steadily, reaching only about 8 by 2020. By contrast, table tennis began with 15 participants inn 2000 and remained stable until 2010. After that it rose sharply to around 35 in 2015 and reached about 55 in 2020, making the second most popular activity. Finally musical pe
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the graph and makes relevant comparisons. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the introduction: the student incorrectly identifies Melbourne and Australia as two different countries, which misinterprets the prompt. While the overview is clear, the report is incomplete as it cuts off abruptly at the end ('Finally musical pe'), failing to describe the final category. This omission prevents a full summary of the data, which limits the score. To improve, ensure all data points are addressed and that the context provided in the prompt is accurately reflected without adding external misconceptions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'By contrast'. However, the flow is interrupted by the incomplete final sentence, which leaves the reader hanging. The referencing is generally clear, but the mechanical nature of some transitions could be improved for better flow. The paragraphing is appropriate for a report of this nature, but the lack of a conclusion or a complete final point impacts the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, with terms like 'fluctuations', 'steadily', and 'proportion' used correctly. However, there are some word-choice errors, such as 'the information that how many numbers' and 'seen continuously fluctuations', which are grammatically awkward. The spelling error 'inn' for 'in' is minor. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on more precise collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main trends, but lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'the information that how many numbers', 'reached at 67', and 'stood 37'. The sentence structure is often clunky, and the abrupt ending indicates a lack of control over the final production. While the meaning is generally clear despite these errors, the frequency of slips in basic grammar and preposition usage prevents a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct prepositional phrases would significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.
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