Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart is illustrates the numbers of participants who took a part five different activities in central in melbourne australia for the period 2002 to 2020.

Overall, the film club remained most popular activities to continues the 2020. some activities was fluctuated like martial arts. meanwhile amateur dramatics activities fell the 2020. and Tennis experiansed the significant growth.

The 65 participants were participated in film club and making a most popular activities in 2000 after 2010 slightly decressed. 35 member participated in martial arts and it was fluctuated till the 2020. In musical performances no participated in 2000 after in 2010 includaed the 10 member in there.

The table tennis had most popular in 2020. suddenly rose and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the task. While you have identified some main features, such as the popularity of the film club and the fluctuations in martial arts, the description is incomplete and ends abruptly. The overview is present but lacks sufficient detail to provide a clear summary of the trends over the 20-year period. To improve, ensure you cover all categories shown in the graph and provide a more comprehensive analysis of the data points, ensuring the response is of sufficient length to allow for full development of the information provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final sentence and the abrupt ending. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'in 2000' and 'in 2020'. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly, such as 'whereas', 'subsequently', or 'in contrast'. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that the information is presented in a way that guides the reader through the data logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of incorrect word choice and awkward phrasing, such as 'The chart is illustrates' and 'experiansed the significant growth'. There are also spelling errors like 'decressed' and 'includaed'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure you are using these terms in the correct grammatical context. Expanding your range of synonyms will also help you avoid repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('some activities was fluctuated'), incorrect verb forms ('The 65 participants were participated'), and missing articles or prepositions. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice for describing data. Proofreading your work for common errors like tense consistency and spelling will also help improve your overall accuracy.

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