Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The line graph provide the data on the number of visitors for five different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia between the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film club gained more attention of participants, and remained popular activity over the decades. While, musical performances and Amateur dramatics fined least concentration.
The sports activities fined most popular among the participants. In year 2000, film club stood at 64 then it experienced a slight decline till year 2010. After year 2010 film club significantly rise and reach at about 69. However, table tennis was at 18 in first decade it slightly increased the participation to 20, by 2nd decade it sharply gained the interest of people and made up 55.
Musical performances at first was neglected but after the half of decade it gained attention and surge the number of participants to 20 till 2020. Amateur dramatics saw a sharp decline from 2005 to 2020 although, Martial arts fluctuated over the two decades. In comparison, film club and table were most preferable activities , other three fined least favor.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the popularity of the film club and the significant growth of table tennis. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting; for example, stating 'film club stood at 64' lacks context regarding the unit of measurement, and some descriptions of trends are vague (e.g., 'fined least concentration'). To improve, ensure you provide a clearer overview and more accurate data points to support your comparisons, as some figures mentioned are difficult to verify against the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'While', and 'However' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. The transition between the overview and the specific details could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'the latter', 'the former') is used to avoid repeating the names of activities too frequently.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'experienced a slight decline', 'significantly rise', and 'fluctuated'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'fined least concentration' instead of 'received the least attention' or 'fined least favor'. Additionally, there are minor errors in word form, such as 'popular activity' missing an article. To improve, focus on learning common collocations used in data description and ensure you use precise terminology for trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The line graph provide', 'film club... rise') and tense inconsistencies. Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are slightly disjointed. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall fluency. To improve, pay closer attention to verb tenses when describing past data and ensure subject-verb agreement is consistent throughout your writing.
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