Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph show number of participants in different activities in one social centre in Melbourne from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, film club was most popular activity. Table tennis go up very much in period. Amateur dramatics go down. Musical performances start from zero and increase later.

In 2000, film club have about 64 participants. Then it go down little and in 2020 it reach around 66. Martial arts was 36 in 2000. It decrease to 32 in 2005 and after some changes it finish at 36 in 2020.

Amateur dramatics was 26 in 2000 and 28 in 2005. After that it fall every year and become about 6 in 2020. Table tennis start with 16 participants. It become 20 in 2005 and 2010. Then it increase fast to 35 in 2015 and 54 in 2020.

Musical performances had 0 participants in 2000 and 2005. After that it increase to 12 in 2010, 16 in 2015 and 18 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the task by identifying the main features and trends of the graph. You have successfully selected key data points for each activity and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the popularity of the film club and the growth of table tennis. However, the overview is somewhat brief and could be more analytical. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview highlights the most significant trends (e.g., the contrast between the declining amateur dramatics and the rising table tennis) more clearly. The data is generally accurate, though the description of the film club's trend is slightly simplified.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with each activity or group of activities discussed in its own section. There is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the overview and then to the body paragraphs. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., starting sentences with 'In 2000', 'Then', 'After that'). To improve, try to vary your linking words and phrases to create a smoother flow between sentences and ideas, which would help the text feel less like a list of data points.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the trends effectively. You use terms like 'participants', 'increase', 'decrease', and 'fall' correctly. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. To achieve a higher score, you should incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', or 'a significant rise'. Additionally, ensure that you use appropriate collocations when describing data changes to demonstrate a more sophisticated control of language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The graph show', 'film club have', 'it go down') and verb tense consistency (e.g., 'it reach', 'it become'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the information, they are persistent throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data. Incorporating more complex sentence structures would also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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