Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

Australia used by increased in 2020

Main feature almost 60 plus

the film club is almost discreasd

however is 10 percent increase by film club

and also

Australia used increase by 20 in not modern

I think 30 percent Australia almost dead

butt 40 percent used Australia increased bt amateur dramatics

butt suddenly Australia discreasd by 50

number of account activity Australia almost number of one 79 percent

so

Australian main future change musical performance

and

butt number of participants metrial arts

summerise the Australia is more powerful country and other city

so i think Australia county effort and watching it

people are dream county

so i think ni disadvantage Australia

people are very peaceful and good vibes

so Australia is the very good county and very fast improvement in Australia

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to address the task requirements. Instead of summarizing the data from the graph, the text provides irrelevant personal opinions about Australia as a country. There is no clear attempt to report on the trends of the activities (e.g., film club, martial arts, musical performance) shown in the graph. The information provided is fragmented, inaccurate, and does not describe the main features or make relevant comparisons. Furthermore, the response is under the minimum word count requirement, which significantly impacts the ability to fulfill the task. To improve, you must focus strictly on the data provided in the visual prompt and avoid adding external opinions or general knowledge.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response lacks logical organization and progression. It consists of disjointed phrases and sentences that do not form a coherent summary. There is no paragraph structure, and the use of cohesive devices is either absent or misused (e.g., the repetitive use of 'butt' and 'so'). The ideas do not follow a logical sequence, making it difficult for the reader to follow any intended meaning. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of main trends, and specific details, using appropriate linking words to connect your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is extremely limited and often misused. Many words are used incorrectly in context, such as 'discresad' (decreased), 'metrial arts' (martial arts), and 'future' (feature). The response relies on a very narrow range of words, and the frequent spelling errors impede communication. There is no evidence of the ability to use vocabulary to describe trends or data points accurately. To improve, focus on learning specific terminology for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' 'peaked,' and 'declined,' and ensure you check your spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The grammatical structure is highly fragmented and lacks control. There are almost no complete, grammatically correct sentences. The response contains frequent errors in word order, sentence construction, and basic grammar, which makes the text very difficult to understand. There is no attempt at complex sentence structures, and even simple sentences are riddled with errors. To improve, you should practice writing simple, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and work on basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures.

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