Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graph compares the number of participants for various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, Film club remained the highest, whereas music performances experienced the greatest decrease over the time period, while other group of activities displayed fluctuation over the year.

Film club accounted for the largest number of participants at around 65, before it falling to 60 participants in 2010. It then rose to the same level as the beginning. Despite this change it remained the dominant category. By contrast, Amateur dramatics followed the opposite pattern decreasing from 25 to nearly 5 participants.

Turning to the remaining categories, the figure for table tennis grew steadily then at the 2010 it increased dramatically from nearly 20 to 50 participants in year 2020, while the martial arts remains same over the period. Finally, there were no participants for musical performance in the year 2005 there were some participants and it rose steadily over the year, which accounted for 18 participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points. You have successfully identified the dominant category (Film club) and the contrasting trends of other activities. However, the description of the musical performance data is confusing and inaccurate; you state there were 'no participants' in 2005, then immediately contradict this by saying 'there were some participants,' which makes the data reporting unclear. To reach a higher band, ensure that your data interpretation is precise and that you avoid contradictory statements when describing trends. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the main features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'By contrast,' 'Turning to,' and 'Finally' to guide the reader through the information. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the referencing within the final paragraph is a bit disjointed. The paragraphing is appropriate, and there is a clear progression of ideas throughout the response. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the relationship between sentences is always smooth and logical.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'dominant category,' 'fluctuation,' and 'dramatically.' There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'other group of activities' (should be 'other groups') and 'remains same' (should be 'remained the same'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for a higher band. Incorporating more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and ensuring correct collocations would enhance your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'before it falling' (should be 'before falling'), 'at the 2010 it increased' (should be 'in 2010, it increased'), and 'over the year' (should be 'over the years'). These errors are noticeable but do not impede communication. To improve, pay closer attention to verb tenses and article usage. While you attempt complex structures, the frequency of minor errors prevents the writing from being considered consistently accurate.

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