Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graph compares the numbers of participants across five different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, the graph shows the film club accounted for the largest share throughout the two decades. Martial arts participants demonstrated an oscillating line graph throughout with ups and downs regularly, while amateur dramatics increased initially, followed by a steady decline till the end. Table tennis showed steady rise in the start with a sudden surge seen from mid to end. Musical performances started increasing late than others but showed a steady increase throughout.

Initially, the film club started from the highest point at 64 participants showing activity, which declined to 60 in 2005, followed by a further decrease to 59 in 2010. A sudden increase was seen following this to 64 again in 2015 with coming to an end at 65 in 2020.

As for martial arts, a lot of ups and downs were seen with start from 36 participants in 2000, followed by a decline to 30 in 2005 and again a rise to 40 in 2010. In 2015, this saw another decline to 34 and finally an up again was seen in 2020 at 40.

Amateur dramatics, depicted a good start at 26 in 2000 and increased to 30 by 2005. After that a steady decline was followed to 7 participants by 2020. Table tennis saw an increase in 2010 at 21 from 18 in 2000 and steadied a bit to 22 in 2010. A sudden surge was seen touching almost 40 in 2015 same as amateur dramatics with continuous rise to 52 in 2020 and coming second.

Musical performances in 2005 started an all time low at 0 and rose suddenly to 12 by 2010 with a slight rise to 16 by 2015. Finally reached its peak at 18 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully identified the main features and trends of the graph. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with data from the graph. However, there are some inaccuracies in your reporting of the data. For example, you stated that amateur dramatics reached 7 participants by 2020, but the graph shows it closer to 10. Additionally, you mentioned that table tennis reached 52 in 2020, while the graph indicates it is closer to 50. While you covered all categories, ensuring higher precision when reading the data points is essential for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs dedicated to specific activities. You used cohesive devices such as 'Initially', 'As for', and 'Finally' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by grouping activities with similar trends (e.g., those that increased vs. those that declined) rather than listing them one by one. This would create a more cohesive and analytical flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'oscillating', 'steady decline', 'sudden surge', and 'all time low'. These are appropriate for describing trends in a graph. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'started increasing late than others' (should be 'later than') and 'coming to an end at 65' (should be 'ending at'). Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would further enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'Musical performances in 2005 started an all time low at 0' (should be 'started at an all-time low of 0') and 'an up again was seen' (awkward phrasing). There are also some punctuation and article errors throughout the text. To reach a higher band, focus on refining your sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement.

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