Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants involves in a variety of activities at one social club in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, It is evident that film club was remained higher throughout the period. Table tennis and amateur dramatics both showed an opposite trend, while material arts remain stable.

Firstly, although, the figure of film club showed small dip in 2010, it experienced a large amount of participants, starting at 62 and ending at 63 between 2000 and 2020. Material art experienced a fluctuation but remained at same level between 2000 and 2020. Amateur dramatics started at 26 in 2000 and experienced a decrease at

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the task. While you have identified some main features, the report is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. To achieve a higher band, you must provide a more comprehensive overview and ensure all data trends are fully described. The lack of completion means that the task is only partially addressed, as the final data points and comparisons are missing. You should aim to write at least 150 words to ensure all aspects of the graph are covered in sufficient detail.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into an introduction and an overview, but the lack of a full body paragraph structure makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly' and 'although', but they are sometimes used incorrectly, such as 'although' being placed at the start of a sentence without a following clause. Paragraphing is also insufficient due to the incomplete nature of the text. To improve, ensure that each main feature is presented in a logical, well-connected paragraph with clear transitions between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are some errors in word choice, such as 'material arts' instead of 'martial arts' and 'involves' instead of 'involved'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic descriptors like 'small dip' or 'large amount'. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained relatively stable', or 'experienced a marginal decline'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'film club was remained higher' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'the film club remained higher'. There are also issues with sentence structure, such as the incomplete sentence at the end of the text. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. Focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that sentences are complete and punctuated correctly before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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