Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The graph illustrates the people who are participated in the various activities (Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, Musical performances) were conducted in Melbourne, Australia at unknown social center in between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, Film club is recorded high participants in over all period. Furthermore, Table tennis steadily increased thier paticipation count by 2020. While Martial arts performed constant cycle and Musical performances started in 2005 and gradually grew their involvement. The participation of Amateur dramatics was declined which is secured least count.

Regarding Film culb, started with more people in between 60 to 70 by 2000 and continuous reduce count to 60 in 2010. After that it reaches to same starting stage level. Table tennis also saw a postive trend, it began with around 16 participants in 2000 and stay relative flat until 2010. After 2010, it experienced a dramatic surge, reach over 50 participants by 2020,

Turning to other activities, Martial arts maintained a consistent participent base, changes between 30 to 40 people across the 20 years. Conversely, amateur dramatics started with about 26 members in 2000 and rose slightly in 2005 after experienced continuous down fall to below 10 members by 2020. Finally, musical performances entire absent between 2000 to 2005. In 2005, the count increased from 0 to 12 in 2010 and then performed steady growth reaches to roughly 18 members by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including trends and comparisons. You successfully identified the main features, such as the popularity of the Film club and the surge in Table tennis participation. However, the overview is slightly cluttered with specific data points, which should be reserved for the body paragraphs. To improve, focus the overview on the most significant trends (e.g., the overall dominance of the Film club and the contrasting fortunes of Table tennis and Amateur dramatics) without citing specific numbers. The summary is otherwise accurate and addresses all parts of the prompt effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Regarding', 'Turning to', and 'Conversely' to signal shifts in focus. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing (e.g., 'their' referring to 'Table tennis' as a plural entity). Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related information. To reach a higher band, ensure that the flow between sentences is smoother and that pronouns clearly refer back to their intended nouns.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'steady growth', 'dramatic surge', and 'consistent participant base'. There are some noticeable errors in word choice and form, such as 'participated' instead of 'participants', 'continuous reduce count' instead of 'a continuous reduction', and 'entire absent' instead of 'entirely absent'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and adverbs would further enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Film club is recorded high participants', 'Amateur dramatics was declined'). Some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'the people who are participated in the various activities... were conducted'. While these errors are frequent, they rarely prevent the reader from understanding the intended meaning. To improve, focus on consistent tense usage when describing past trends and ensure subjects and verbs agree correctly.

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