Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The illustration depicts number of people participated in different activities at a social centre located in Melbourne, Australia during the period of 2000 to 2020. Overall, six categories are mentioned, while film club dominates across all the period.
In the year 2000, 65 participants took part in film club which slightly decreased in 2005, followed by 2010. But there was a increase in participants in 2015, and even more rise in 2020. Material arts was the second most preference, but participants number changed slightly throughout the time, such as 48 in 2000, 32 in 2005, 49 in 2010, again 48 in 2015, and 49 in 2020. Next, Amateur dramatics is the third most category with 24 participant initially in 2000, that increases slightly in 2005 but there was a significant decrease in number of participants in 2010, and increased toa greater extent by 55. Furthermore, 16 people participated in table tennis in 2000, which increased to 20 participant in 2005 and 2010, followed by decrease in 2015 and 2020 by 12 and 5 participants respectively. Finally, musical performance was not appeared in 2000, but initiated in 2005 although no one participated, but in 10 people participated 2010, and number rose up to 18 and 20 in 2015 and 2020 respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trend and specific data points for the categories. You successfully identified the dominant category (film club) and noted the changes over time. However, the report is somewhat mechanical, relying heavily on listing figures rather than synthesizing the data into meaningful comparisons. To reach a higher band, focus on grouping trends (e.g., categories that increased vs. those that fluctuated) rather than describing each category in isolation. The overview is present but could be more analytical regarding the overall shifts in popularity across the twenty-year period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In the year 2000', and 'Furthermore' to link sentences. However, some transitions are slightly repetitive or mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, though the flow between sentences could be improved by using more varied cohesive markers to show contrast or similarity more effectively. The paragraphing is appropriate for a task of this nature, helping the reader follow the information easily.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the information, such as 'depicts', 'dominates', and 'significant decrease'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'Material arts' (should be 'Martial arts') and 'not appeared' (should be 'did not appear'). Additionally, phrases like 'rose up to' are slightly informal. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a downward trend', and ensure correct spelling of technical terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the number of people'), verb tense consistency ('was a increase'), and preposition usage ('participated in 2010'). Some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'musical performance was not appeared in 2000'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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