Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The graph illustrates the number of participants across different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the year 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club is the most popular activity among participants. In contrast, musical performances have a realtively small number of proportion. Martial arts and amatuer dramatics have a moderate interest among particpants. However, the popularity of amateur dramatics has abruptly fallen over the years. Meanwhile, tabel tennis had the most significant increase in trends among all activities.
Starting with the most popular sports film club. Film club had a impressive number of 65 participants in 2000 which gradually dropped to 60 in 2020 however in 2020 it regained its inital number of participants back. The activity with the least number of participants in 2005 is musical performances with 0 participants, however by 2020 this number rose steadily to 20 participants. Martial arts was very steady, during the period. Initally in the year 2000 it had 35 participants, which grew marginaly to 40 participants by 2010 and than gradually declining back again to 35 participants by 2020. Table tennis once stood at just 15 participants in 2000 , however by 2020 this number grew substantially to 55 participants in 2020.
Amateur dramatics once stood at 26 participants in 2000. However, it plummeted to just 5 participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all parts of the task, providing a clear overview and reporting on the main trends for each activity. You successfully identified the most popular activity and the one with the most significant growth. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting; for example, you state the film club 'regained its initial number' in 2020, but the graph shows it ended at 60, not 65. Additionally, describing musical performances as having a 'small number of proportion' is slightly awkward. To improve, ensure that data points are read precisely and that comparisons are made more explicitly between categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Meanwhile', 'Starting with', and 'However' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is slightly unbalanced, as the final paragraph regarding amateur dramatics is very short and could have been integrated into the previous body paragraph. Additionally, some transitions feel a bit mechanical. To reach a higher band, focus on creating a smoother flow between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'abruptly', 'gradually', and 'substantially'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'realtively' (relatively), 'amatuer' (amateur), and 'tabel' (table). The phrase 'small number of proportion' is also non-standard. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on proofreading for spelling and ensuring that collocations are used correctly in an academic context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the year 2000 to 2020' (should be 'the years 2000 to 2020'), 'than gradually declining' (should be 'then'), and 'grew marginaly' (should be 'marginally'). Additionally, some sentences are slightly clunky, such as 'The activity with the least number of participants in 2005 is musical performances'. While these errors are noticeable, they rarely impede the reader's understanding of the data.
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