Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The line graph illustrates information about the participants who participated in five different activities at social center in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, table tennis participants experienced a significant upward trend while, amateur dramatics participants witnessed a steady decline throughout the period. Notably, film club remained dominant category throughout the period. However, martial arts participants remained constant with minor fluctuations.
To begin with musical performance, the number of participants increased from 0 in 2005 to 11 in 2010, after that it end up reaching at 15 in 2020. Subsequently, participants for film club started with 63 in 2000, which had the highest figure, experienced steady growth throughout the period and remained approximately same by the end of the period, before experiencing a fall in 2010. Participants who participated in martial arts started with 35 and with some oscillations it remained unchanged during the end of the period.
It can be seen that table tennis participants grew sharply after 2010, which ended up being 50 in 2020. Participants for amateur dramatics recorded almost same number, which was 26. however, after 2005 it experienced a dramatic fall and reached its lowest point with only 5 participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 7.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points. You successfully identified the significant growth in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the description of the film club is slightly confusing; you mention it remained the dominant category but then describe a fall in 2010 that is not clearly supported by the visual data. To improve, ensure that your data reporting is precise and that you clearly distinguish between the overall trends and the specific figures. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the main movements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Subsequently', and 'It can be seen that' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For instance, the transition between the film club and martial arts in the third paragraph is a bit abrupt. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear, and the paragraphing is appropriate for an Academic Task 1 response.
Lexical Resource — Band 7.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'significant upward trend', 'steady decline', and 'oscillations'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'remained approximately same' (should be 'the same') and 'it end up reaching at' (should be 'it reached'). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, some phrasing is slightly unnatural. Expanding your range of collocations related to data trends would help elevate your score further.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'participants who participated' (redundant), 'remained constant with minor fluctuations' (good), and 'recorded almost same number' (missing article). Additionally, there are issues with verb tense consistency and preposition usage, such as 'reaching at'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will improve your accuracy.
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