Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants engaged for five different activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the number of participants at film clubs and martial arts fluctuated over that period, with the film club experienced most participants. The figures for table tennis and musical performances experience the growth of participants over 2 decades. However,

Amateur dramatics participants decline over time.

In 2000, Film club participants were around 64 and remain stable over the 20 years. On the other side, almost 16 participants were at table tennis and remain under 20 till 2010. But saw a dramatic increase in the last decade and remain at top just after the film club. However, almost 26 participants enrolled in amateur dramatics in 2000 but decrease sharply from 2005 and less than 10 players remained after 2020.

The Martial arts participants fluctuated but remain stable at approximately 36 participants at the end of 2020.the participants for musical performance started from 2005 and increased gradually at 20 participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the decline in amateur dramatics and the growth in table tennis. However, the overview is slightly weak; while you mention fluctuations, you could improve by highlighting the most significant overall change or the highest/lowest participants more clearly. The data reporting is generally accurate, though some figures are slightly imprecise (e.g., 'around 64'). To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons between categories are more explicit rather than just listing individual trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'On the other side' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and some mechanical transitions. For instance, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different data sets, which helps the reader follow your analysis. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to create a more natural progression between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'dramatic increase', and 'gradually'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'experience the growth' instead of 'experienced growth' and 'remain at top' instead of 'remained at the top'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, try to incorporate more varied reporting verbs and nouns to describe trends, and pay closer attention to article usage (e.g., 'the' film club).

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'film club experienced most participants' (should be 'had the most') and 'participants decline' (should be 'declined'). Additionally, some sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles. While these errors are noticeable, they rarely prevent the reader from understanding the intended meaning. To improve, focus on consistent tense usage when describing past data and ensure that every sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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