Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

the multiple lines graph illustrates the number of members of the social centre of melbourne in the two decades .the members participated in multiple activities .

overall the ,over the year the more participant got involved in the activities on the table tannis and musical plays .while the amateur dramatics lost its interest for public being flaucated ,two types of activities which are filime club and martailarts levellled off .another stricking points is that over a twenty years periods between 2000 to 2020.the film club kept its position as the most activity.looking at the details about the table tannis 15 menbers of the participants were interested to play in 2000 .the number of members were increased by 3percent with in next five years however the was the surge in the tennis player by 50% in 2020. film club has the highest range of participantin 2000 there were about 75 members were activity participated and by next two decades it surged by 5 percent.

the member of amuateur dramatics are constantly dropping by there were 25 active participant in 2000 .by the passage of it the member declining and by thw 2020 its harldy to be seen any active participant.while taking about thebmucical performances there were only 10 member by 2010 which steadily reached to 15 by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying trends such as the growth in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the data reporting is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, stating the film club 'surged by 5 percent' over two decades is a misinterpretation of the data. Furthermore, the description of the martial arts and film club as 'levelled off' is not supported by the visual evidence provided. While the response attempts to highlight key trends, the lack of precision in reporting figures and the misinterpretation of the data trends prevent it from reaching a higher band. The overview is present but lacks clarity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'while taking about thebmucical performances' and 'another stricking points'. The progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logic of the comparisons. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between sentences is often abrupt. To improve, focus on using linking words more naturally and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary range is limited and contains frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'tannis' instead of 'tennis', 'filime' for 'film', 'martailarts' for 'martial arts', and 'amuateur' for 'amateur'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally impede communication. The student relies on basic descriptive language and struggles to use precise terminology for describing trends (e.g., 'lost its interest for public being flaucated'). There is little evidence of less common lexical items, and the frequent spelling mistakes suggest a need for more careful proofreading and vocabulary development.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'the number of members were increased by 3percent with in next five years however the was the surge in the tennis player by 50% in 2020.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misplaced commas and periods. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often faulty and cause difficulty for the reader. A focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors is essential.

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