Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graphs compares the number of people participating for diverse activities( film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances ) at social centre in Melbourne, Australia over a period of 20 years between 2000 to 2020. The unit is measure in Numbers .
Overall, Film club dominated throughout the period . Martial arts fluctuated over the period despite no change in the final year . Table tennis dropped over the first decade and surged in the last 10 years . Meanwhile, Amateur dramatics showed a drastic decline . Musical performances remained least throughout the period despite showing a significant increase .
In terms for Film club , it recorded the most number of participants in the opening year with around 65 participants and showed a minute fluctuation by ending with no change . Talking about Martial arts , started with around 38 participants at the start of the decade, recorded its peak in year 2010 with 39 participants and ended with the same in the initial year .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
You have identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. However, the response is incomplete as it fails to describe the data for 'amateur dramatics', 'table tennis', and 'musical performances' in the body paragraphs. The task requires you to report on all categories shown in the graph. By only detailing the 'film club' and 'martial arts', you have not fully addressed all parts of the task. To improve, ensure that every category mentioned in the introduction is supported by specific data points in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is a logical flow between the introduction and the overview. You use some cohesive devices like 'Meanwhile' and 'In terms of', which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression is interrupted because the body paragraphs do not cover all the information promised in the introduction. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is clear, but the lack of detail for the remaining activities makes the overall cohesion feel incomplete.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'surged', and 'drastic decline' appropriately. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'The unit is measure in Numbers' (should be 'measured') and 'In terms for Film club' (should be 'In terms of'). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring grammatical accuracy when using technical terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'The graphs compares' (subject-verb agreement), 'at social centre' (missing article), and 'recorded the most number of participants' (should be 'highest number'). While these errors are noticeable, they rarely impede the reader's understanding of the data. To reach a higher band, you should proofread your work to correct basic subject-verb agreement and article usage, and aim for more consistent accuracy in complex sentence constructions.
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