Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graphs compares the number of people participating for diverse activities( film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances ) at social centre in Melbourne, Australia over a period of 20 years between 2000 to 2020. The unit is measure in Numbers .

Overall, Film club dominated throughout the period . Martial arts fluctuated over the period despite no change in the final year . Table tennis dropped over the first decade and surged in the last 10 years . Meanwhile, Amateur dramatics showed a drastic decline . Musical performances remained least throughout the period despite showing a significant increase .

In terms for Film club , it recorded the most number of participants in the opening year with around 65 participants and showed a minute fluctuation by ending with no change . Talking about Martial arts , started with around 38 participants at the start of the decade, recorded its peak in year 2010 with 39 participants and ended with the same in the initial year .

Meanwhile, Table tennis opened at around 16 participants in the initial year and recorded a minute increase in year 2010 at 20 participants , then rose dramatically over the next decade to around 55 participants . On the other hand , Amateur dramatics , started at around 25 participants by the start of the decades and recorded a sharp fall over the next 15 years between 2005 and 2020 . However , the musical performances recorded the lowest amongst the rest in the 2005 at o participants and showed the huge increase over the period ending at around 20 participants while still being the lowest of all .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points. You have successfully identified the main features, such as the dominance of the Film club and the contrasting trends between Table tennis and Amateur dramatics. However, the report could be improved by ensuring more precise data reporting. For instance, stating that the Film club ended with 'no change' is slightly vague, and the description of the Martial arts trend is repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are more explicit, such as contrasting the growth of Table tennis directly against the decline of Amateur dramatics, rather than listing them in separate sentences.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group the activities effectively. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'Meanwhile', 'On the other hand', and 'However' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing, such as 'Talking about Martial arts' and 'In terms for Film club', which sound slightly unnatural. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed analysis. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated transitions that connect the sentences more fluidly rather than relying on repetitive sentence starters.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'surged', 'drastic decline', and 'recorded'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'The unit is measure in Numbers' (should be 'measured') and 'in terms for' (should be 'in terms of'). Additionally, 'minute fluctuation' is used to describe a trend that appears stable, which is slightly imprecise. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, incorporating more varied and precise academic collocations would help elevate the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'The graphs compares' (subject-verb agreement), 'at one social centre' (missing article), and 'at o participants' (typo). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band score. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and ensure that articles are used correctly before singular countable nouns.

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