Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the information about how many people participates in five different activities at a social center in Melbourne between the time period of 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club attracted the highest participants in over 20 years. The amateur dramatics is consistently decline over the time period. The table tennis, martial arts and musical performances showed the notable participants.
To start with, in 2000 the film club lead the highest participants almost 64 attendance. It remain stabled during the twenty years. The participants in the amateur dramatics in 2000 was almost 25. They were continuously dropped over the time period. In 2020 only 5 participants was left. The participants in musical performances started in the 2005. In 2020 almost 15 participants in musical performances. The participants in martial art in 2000 was almost 38 and in 2020 it was almost same participants. The table tennis showed the notable performances. In 2000 it participants was almost 17 and in 2020 it participants was almost 55.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and providing data points for the five activities. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the relationships between the data. While the main features are mentioned, the description of the trends is occasionally inaccurate (e.g., stating the film club remained 'stabled' when it shows fluctuations, or misinterpreting the start date for musical performances). To improve, ensure that the overview synthesizes the data rather than just listing individual trends, and double-check the accuracy of the data points extracted from the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive. Phrases like 'To start with' and 'In 2000' are used frequently, which makes the flow feel mechanical. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas or contrast trends effectively. To improve, try using a wider variety of transition signals such as 'In contrast,' 'Conversely,' or 'Meanwhile' to create a smoother progression between sentences and paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'lead the highest participants' instead of 'had the highest number of participants' and 'showed the notable participants' which is grammatically unclear. The repetition of the word 'participants' throughout the text limits the lexical range. To improve, focus on using synonyms and more precise collocations related to data description, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained constant,' or 'experienced a significant increase.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'how many people participates' (subject-verb agreement), 'is consistently decline' (tense error), and 'it participants was' (possessive/pronoun error). These errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past trends. Proofreading for small errors like 'stabled' instead of 'stable' will also help improve accuracy.
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