Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrates that the number of individuals participated in different activities at single social centre in Melbourne, Australia within the time period of 2000 to 2020.

Overall, Film club and table tennis has recorded good growth with huge number of people presence from 2000 and musical performance started growing from 2005 itself. Also, Martial arts and Amateur dramatics were depicts stable and less record.

Firstly, Film club started with almost 65 participants with a moderate growth to reach 68 from the year of 2000 to 2020, table tennis has gradually increased with over people of 15 in the time 2000 to 2010 then it suddenly increased to 52 participants for the year of 2020. Musical performance has initiated its presence from 2005 with 0 and gained 25 performers with a noticed record till 2020.

Secondly, Martial arts has record with about to 38it has seen some fluctuations and remained constant from 2000 to 2020. However, Amateur dramatics has performed a record low with a significant fall from 2005 it reached to 4 participants initially started about to 24.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and making relevant comparisons. However, the reporting of data is occasionally imprecise or confusing, such as the description of Martial arts as 'constant' despite noting 'fluctuations', and the phrasing 'over people of 15' is unclear. While the main features are highlighted, the analysis lacks the precision required for a higher band. The overview is present but could be more effectively synthesized to capture the overall trajectory of the activities more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly', but they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately, such as using 'Secondly' to introduce a paragraph that discusses the remaining activities. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, which hinders the overall progression of ideas. Paragraphing is present but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be more cohesive.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'individuals participated' (should be 'individuals participating'), 'huge number of people presence', and 'noticed record'. The student attempts to use descriptive language, but the lack of precision in word formation and collocation limits the score. The vocabulary is generally repetitive and lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('Film club and table tennis has recorded'), incorrect verb forms ('were depicts'), and awkward phrasing ('has record with about to 38'). While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they are frequent enough to cause some difficulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding the placement of commas and the structure of clauses.

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