Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants in Melbourne at a social center categories by five different activities between the year 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the film club remained dominant throughout the period with the highest numbers of participants. whereas, amateur dramatics represented a gradual decline despite a small increase by 2005, making it the smallest in ranking by the end of period. By contrast, musical performances started in 2005 representing a gradual increase and surpassing amateur dramatics in 2020.
Film club, throughout the two decades, remained the dominant with the highest sum of members despite a slight a decline in 2010, which was recovered afterward. Martial arts, although represented fluctuations in a zigzag manner during the timeframe, remained at same value, at 35 in 2000 and 2020 as well. Conversely, table tennis started at 25 in 2000 and had a slight increase by 2010 and then showed a substantial growth in the next decade, peaking at 51 in 2020.
Moving to musical performances, members joined in 2005 from scratch and grew over 10 in 2010 and had a steady growth reaching near 20 in 2020. In contrast to other categories, amateur dramatics initiated at 25, but had a significant decline after climbing to 30 in 2005, and fell to 5 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the dominant trend of the film club and the contrasting paths of amateur dramatics and table tennis. You successfully identified the start and end points and noted the significant growth in table tennis. However, the overview could be more analytical; while you mention the film club is dominant, you could better highlight the overall shift in popularity among the activities. The inclusion of specific data points like '51 in 2020' and '5 in 2020' demonstrates a good grasp of the data, though ensure that all comparisons are clearly linked to the overall trends to fully satisfy the requirements for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that group information by activity. The use of cohesive devices such as 'By contrast', 'Conversely', and 'In contrast to' helps guide the reader through the comparisons. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more refined to ensure a smoother flow between the general trends and the specific data points. Referencing is generally clear, but ensure that the relationship between sentences is always explicit to avoid minor jumps in logic.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information clearly, using terms like 'dominant', 'substantial growth', and 'fluctuations'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'categories by' instead of 'categorized by' and 'highest sum of members' instead of 'highest number of participants'. While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, some phrasing feels slightly unnatural. To reach a higher band, focus on more precise collocations and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'remained at same value' (missing an article), 'slight a decline' (incorrect article placement), and 'members joined... from scratch' (slightly awkward phrasing). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. You have a good grasp of basic structures, but you should focus on improving your control over articles, prepositions, and verb tenses to ensure greater accuracy in your writing.
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