Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line chart displays the data of individual's participants for various activities at a social centre in Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, Film club showed the highest popularity for the social activities. While, the Amateur dramatics displayed sudden fall in between.
To start with the first activity, Film club had the total of 65 participants in 2000. Which, almost remained constant to the year 2020. At second place, Martial arts showed 35 people at starting and ended at the same amount of people with it, By making an slight increase in the year 2010. The third activity, Amateur dramatics was recognized as good activity with 25 folks taking part in it which remained same next time. After that, there was an unexpected fall with only 5 participants taking part.
The forth one was Table tennis, starting with 15 folks till 2010 and presented a rapid growth with 52 people taking part which made it the second most popular activity by 2020. At last, Musical performances had 0 participants from 2000 to 2005, Moving forward, it covered sudden rise till 2020 with 12 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends for each activity. However, the overview is somewhat weak; it identifies the most popular activity but fails to capture the broader trends or significant changes across the period. The description of the data is occasionally inaccurate, such as stating that the Film club remained 'constant' when the graph shows fluctuations, and the description of Amateur dramatics is vague. To improve, ensure that the overview highlights the most significant trends (e.g., the growth of Table tennis) and that data points are reported with greater precision.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'While, the Amateur dramatics...' is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow. The use of 'To start with' and 'At last' is somewhat repetitive and formulaic. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'Which, almost remained constant...', where the relative pronoun is used incorrectly as a sentence fragment. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There is a reliance on informal or imprecise phrasing, such as 'folks' and 'good activity'. Some collocations are unnatural, such as 'displayed sudden fall' (should be 'experienced a sudden fall') and 'covered sudden rise' (should be 'showed a sharp increase'). While the range is sufficient to convey the main points, the lack of sophisticated or topic-specific vocabulary limits the score. Focusing on more academic reporting verbs and nouns would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include incorrect punctuation (e.g., starting sentences with 'Which' or 'By'), subject-verb agreement errors, and awkward phrasing like 'At second place, Martial arts showed 35 people at starting'. The use of articles and prepositions is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. More attention to sentence boundaries and basic grammatical accuracy is needed.
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