Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph shows data of the number of participants in five various activities at a social centre in Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that film club had the highest number of participants over 20-year period, while amateur dramatics showed a downward trend and became the activity with the fewest participants in 2020. After 2010, table tennis increased rapidly until 2020 and reached the second highest group.
In 2000, the highest number of people participated in film club which was 65, whereas table had 15 members. Amateur dramatics and Martial arts consisted nearly 26 and 36 participants respectively. Amateur dramatics and table tennis had same no of people in 2010 (around 19).
After 2010, table tennis showed a rapid growth until 2020 and amateur dramatics noted downward trend as well as fell to fewer than 5 participants in 2020. Martial arts activity fluctuated till 2020 and returned to the same number of people as in 2010 (nearly 38). Musical performance stood at just over 10 participants in 2010 as well as after 10 years, it showed gradual growth and reached around 19 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have successfully identified the main trends and key features of the graph. The overview is clear, highlighting the dominant activity and the significant changes over the period. You have made relevant comparisons, such as noting the convergence of amateur dramatics and table tennis in 2010. However, the report could be improved by ensuring all data points are accurate; for instance, the description of martial arts fluctuating and returning to the 2010 level is a good analytical observation. To reach a higher band, ensure that all figures mentioned are precise and that the distinction between the start and end points is consistently clear throughout the report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You have used some cohesive devices, such as 'whereas', 'after 2010', and 'as well as', to link ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes a bit mechanical or repetitive. For example, the phrase 'as well as' is used in a way that feels slightly unnatural in the final paragraph. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed data analysis. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the transition between sentences flows more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'downward trend', 'rapid growth', 'fluctuated', and 'gradual growth'. This is appropriate for the task. There are some minor issues with word choice, such as 'five various activities' (which is slightly redundant) and 'table had 15 members' (where 'table tennis' was intended). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Using more precise collocations and avoiding minor slips would enhance the quality of your lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You have demonstrated a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'table had 15 members' (missing the activity name) and 'Amateur dramatics and table tennis had same no of people' (missing articles). Additionally, 'after 10 years, it showed gradual growth' is slightly awkward phrasing. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding the information. To improve, focus on article usage (the/a) and ensure that your sentence subjects are clearly defined to avoid ambiguity.
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