Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph shows the number of participants at a social center in Melbourne, Australia doing different activites from 2000 to 2020. Overall, the number of participants for film club, table tennis, and musical performances has increased. On the other hand, the number of pariticipants in martial arts has been almost the same while the number of people in amateur dramatics has fallen.

To start with, table tennis had the highest increase in the number of participants throughout this time starting at around 16 in 2000 and reaching more than 50 in 2020. Onwards, musical performance started from zero in 2000 and managed to get around 15 members by 2020. Lastly, the film club started and ended with the highest number of people. However, there was a slight decrease in the number of students from 2005 till 2010.

Further on, the number of participants of martial arts fluctuated during this time reaching an all time high of around 39 in 2010 and then falling to its original number in 2020.

Lastly, amateur dramatics had a consistant reduction in its participants throughout this time, except for a brief increase in 2005. Its particiapants went from around 25 in 2000 to around 5 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all categories (film club, table tennis, musical performances, martial arts, and amateur dramatics) and made relevant comparisons. The data points cited are generally accurate, and the report is well-structured. To reach a higher band, ensure that you provide more precise data comparisons, such as noting that table tennis overtook other activities to become the most popular by 2020. Your overview is effective, but ensure it remains distinct from the body paragraphs to clearly highlight the 'main features' as required by the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that group the activities by trend (increasing vs. decreasing). You use cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand', 'To start with', and 'Lastly' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by ensuring each paragraph focuses on a distinct trend rather than just listing activities. The progression of ideas is clear, and the referencing is generally accurate throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'all time high', 'consistant reduction', and 'fluctuated' are appropriate for a data-reporting task. There are a few minor spelling errors, such as 'activites' instead of 'activities' and 'pariticipants' instead of 'participants'. While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, incorporating more sophisticated synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' (e.g., 'surged', 'plummeted', 'experienced a downward trend') would elevate your score. The current range is functional but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. Most of your sentences are clear and easy to follow. There are occasional grammatical slips, such as 'number of participants of martial arts' (should be 'for') and 'number of students' (when referring to club members). Punctuation is generally sound, though some sentences could be refined for better flow. You have good control over basic structures, but to achieve a higher band, you should aim for more complex sentence forms with fewer minor errors.

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