Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is clearly seen that the given graph depicts the information about the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne,Australia from the time period of 2000 to 2020.
In the year 2000 there are approximately 15 players participated in table tennis and 27 players were participated in amateur dramatics and approx there are 37 participants in martial arts and approx 64 players participated in the film club which is the highest in the year 2000.
further more in the year 2005 the graph shows the fluctuations the number of players participated.
As in the year 2005 musical performances were also started with the 0 no participants. Participantion of players in table tennis in the year 2005 were increased to 20 and 29 players participated in amateur dramatics and 32 players participated in the martial arts while the number of the number of players participated in film clubs were 62.
Overall, graph shows the participation of the players among various activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a comprehensive overview. While it mentions some data points for 2000 and 2005, it ignores the rest of the period up to 2020, failing to report on the main trends or significant changes over the full timeframe. The summary is incomplete, and the 'overall' statement is too vague to constitute a clear overview of the main features. To improve, you must identify the key trends (e.g., which activities increased or decreased) across the entire period rather than just listing isolated figures for the first two years.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the lack of a logical structure makes the report difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used in a very limited and repetitive way (e.g., 'in the year 2000', 'in the year 2005'). There is no effective use of linking words to compare or contrast the data, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 response. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'participants' and 'players' in a way that is not always accurate, as not all activities listed (like film clubs or musical performances) involve 'players'. There are also issues with word choice, such as '0 no participants', which is redundant and unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', or 'experienced a downward trend', and ensure your terminology is appropriate for the context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'there are approximately 15 players participated') and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'the number of the number of players'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding the spacing after commas and the use of capital letters. You need to focus on basic sentence construction and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data.
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