Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph show that the numbers of participants different activities at one social centre in the city of Melbourne of Australia during the period 2000 to 2020.
In the graph the number of participants take part different activities the film club the people participants in 2000 is near about 65% during the period 2000 to 2020 they were same after that the martial arts was started in 2000 is about 38% after five year they were slightly decreased and then after five years they were slightly increased so during twenty years they were equal ratio. The Amateur dramatics started 26% in the year 2000 after time to time they were decreased every year last the year they reached 5% in 2020 after that table tennis started in 15% in 2000 after 2010 the ratio highly increased and reached 55% in 2020 further more, the musical performances when started they slightly increased every years.
In the conclusion the activities some are equal every years the amateur dramatics decreased but after it every activity are increased in every year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The description of the data is often confusing and inaccurate; for example, stating that the film club participation remained the same when the graph shows a clear trend, or claiming that martial arts participation remained at an 'equal ratio' over twenty years. The reporting of percentages is frequently imprecise or incorrect based on the provided visual data. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant trends (e.g., the sharp rise in table tennis or the steady decline in amateur dramatics) and ensure that the data points cited are accurate and clearly linked to the specific activity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'after that' and 'after five years', which creates a mechanical and repetitive flow. The conclusion is also weak, as it does not effectively summarize the main trends but rather makes a vague, inaccurate statement about the data. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'subsequently', 'meanwhile') and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping activities by their upward or downward trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often repetitive. You rely heavily on basic phrases like 'started in', 'increased', and 'decreased'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the ratio highly increased' instead of 'participation increased significantly' or 'the people participants' which is grammatically awkward. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends with precision. To improve, try to incorporate more specific verbs and adverbs to describe movement, such as 'fluctuated', 'plummeted', 'gradually', or 'sharply', and ensure you are using nouns and verbs in their correct forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as missing verbs ('The line graph show that the numbers...'), incorrect prepositions, and run-on sentences. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and the use of articles is frequently incorrect or omitted. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences that lack complexity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of tense when describing past trends versus current states.
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