Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Introduzione:
The graph below reports some informations relating to the numbers of people partecipating to different activities at one social center in Melbourne since 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is possible to notice that the film club is the most partecipated activity by far, compared to the other ones.
It is also interesting to highlight the growth in terms of partecipants of the table tennis club that, although in 2000 was the fourth most partecipated club, it has been able to overpass the amateur dramatics club and the martial arts club too, becoming the second most followed activity.
The club who has been more stable in terms of number of partecipants is the club of martial arts with 30 partecipants. Instead, the amateur dramatics, even if until 2005 had zero partecipants, it has been able to get more partecipatnts that the amateur tdramatics
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you identify the main trends, such as the film club's popularity and the growth of table tennis, the analysis is incomplete. You mention the amateur dramatics club but fail to provide a clear comparison or finish the sentence, leaving the data under-reported. To improve, ensure you cover all categories shown in the graph and provide a clear, data-driven summary that compares the trends across the entire 20-year period. The current response is too brief to fully address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into an introduction and two body paragraphs, which provides a basic structure. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete final sentence and the lack of a concluding summary. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall' and 'Instead', but they are somewhat mechanical. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the comparison between clubs becomes confusing due to the unfinished sentence. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that you use a wider variety of linking words to connect your observations more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several spelling errors, such as 'partecipating' (participating) and 'partecipants' (participants), which occur repeatedly. Additionally, the phrasing 'overpass' is not the most natural choice in this context; 'overtake' or 'surpass' would be more appropriate. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on repetitive terms. To improve, focus on using more varied reporting verbs and nouns related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained constant', or 'experienced a significant rise'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'since 2000 to 2020' should be 'from 2000 to 2020', and 'the club who has been' should use 'which' instead of 'who'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and sentence fragments, particularly in the final paragraph where the sentence is left unfinished. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic errors in prepositions and relative pronouns, and ensure that every sentence you write is complete and grammatically sound.
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