Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph depicts information about the five various tasks that people wanted to participated at social centre in Melbourne,Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall,it is clear that the maximum number of people preferred to participated in film club whereas very few people wanted to do amateur dramatics activity at the end of the year.
After analyzing the graph,it is evident that the highest number of folks liked to join film club activity in 2000 near about 65 and it followed the same trend throughout the end of the year.Whereas, only 38 people wanted to participated in martial arts in 2000 the it remained fluctuated from 2005 to 2020 respectively.
Furthermore,the table tennis activity around 18 people wanted to participated in 2000,which followed upward trend after five years after that it grew dramatically from 2010 to 2020 and it reached at nearby 50 people.However,near by 28 people joined amateur dramatics task in 2000 then it fell dramatically from 2010 to 2020.At last,the people are not interested in musical performances in first two years after 2010 it increased steadily at the end of year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and comparing the five activities. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, while you mention the 'highest number' and 'upward trend', the data points are often imprecise (e.g., 'near about 65', 'nearby 50'). To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are reported more accurately and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant differences or similarities across the entire period rather than just listing individual trends. The summary is functional but lacks a more sophisticated synthesis of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear overall progression. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'After analyzing', and 'Furthermore'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'At last' to introduce the final point. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and some sentences feel disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the transition between sentences flows more naturally to guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision. You frequently use basic phrases like 'number of people' and 'wanted to participated'. There are also some word choice errors, such as 'tasks' instead of 'activities' and 'folks' (which is too informal for an Academic Task 1). To achieve a higher score, incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'peaked', and avoid informal language. Ensure that your collocations are accurate, such as 'participate in' rather than 'participated in'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people wanted to participated'), incorrect verb forms, and missing articles. For example, 'it remained fluctuated' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'it fluctuated'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like tense consistency and verb patterns.
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