Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This diagram illustrates the information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Australia for a period of 2000to 2020.
Overall, film club has the highest number of participants and musical performance has the least interaction of peoples followed by martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis.
From 2000 to 2010, film club has the largest number of participants about 63 in 2000 and decreased to 61 in 2005 and then to 60 in 2010, then followed by martial arts of 35 in 2000, 30 in 2005 and to 39 in 2010. By contrast, amateur dramatics shows a decline throughout the the graph as 25 in 2000 and increased to 30 peoples then decreased to 20 in 2010 and table tennis is increasing throughout the diagram and musical performanace is gets popular from 2005 and till the number of participants is increasing till 2020.
From 2010 to 2020,
From 2010 onwards till 2020,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to address the task fully. While it identifies some main features, the analysis is incomplete as the report stops abruptly after the introduction of the second time period (2010–2020). The overview is present but lacks clarity, and the data reporting is inconsistent, with some figures mentioned without clear context. The failure to complete the description of the second half of the graph significantly impacts the ability to provide a comprehensive summary or make meaningful comparisons across the entire period. To improve, ensure all data points are covered and that the summary is balanced across the entire timeframe provided in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is problematic, with the final section consisting of incomplete sentences and repetitive headers. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes inaccurate way, such as the repetitive use of 'and' to connect clauses. The progression of ideas is hindered by the abrupt ending, which leaves the reader without a sense of completion. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, and employ a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') to connect ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'least interaction of peoples' and 'musical performance is gets popular'. The student relies on basic descriptors and struggles with accurate collocations. Spelling errors, such as 'performanace', also detract from the overall quality. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a steady growth', and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'musical performance is gets popular'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward sentence construction. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the spacing and the incomplete sentences at the end of the text. The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, the student should practice using complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, and pay closer attention to basic grammatical accuracy, particularly verb tenses and pluralization.
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