Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given graph illustrates the data about number of participants for various performances at one community-hub in Melbourne, the capital of Australia between the years of 2000 and 2020.
Overall, there is fluctuation in the rates of number of participants for each activity. The Film club, Martial arts, Table tennis, and Musical performances experienced the rise while Amateur dramatics experienced decline in the rate.
Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, and Musical performances showed big variations. Amateur dramatics declined from the rate of around 26% in 2000 to almost 8% in 2020. Table tennis displays a big rise in level. It rose from around 15% in 2000 to almost 53% in 2020. Likewise, Musical performances started in 2005 with no performers and rose to almost 15% in 2020.
Film club, and Martial arts made smaller differences. The Film club rose from around 64% in 2000 to almost 65% in 2020. The martial arts rose from around 45% in 2000 to almost 46% in 2020. Both showed the rise of 1% only.
In conclusion, all activities showed the rise in rates except Amateur dramatics which experienced a bad downfall.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task and provides a clear overview. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the significant growth in Table tennis and the decline in Amateur dramatics. However, the report could be improved by providing more precise comparisons between the categories rather than listing them individually. For instance, noting that Table tennis overtook the Film club as the most popular activity by 2020 would have added depth. While the data is generally accurate, ensure that you consistently use the correct terminology (e.g., 'percentage' instead of 'rate') to reflect the graph's content more precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Overall,' 'Likewise,' and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, the progression between sentences can feel slightly mechanical. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the transition between the description of individual trends and the comparison of those trends is smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, with each paragraph focusing on a specific aspect of the data, which helps the reader follow your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuation,' 'experienced,' and 'variations.' However, there is some repetitive use of basic verbs like 'rose' and 'showed.' Additionally, there are minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as using 'rate' when referring to percentages, and 'bad downfall,' which is not an academic collocation. To improve, incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'surged,' 'plummeted,' or 'remained relatively stable,' and ensure that your word choices are consistently formal and appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is sufficient for the task. There are some grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('the' number of participants, 'the' rise) and minor issues with preposition usage. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on the correct use of articles and ensure subject-verb agreement is consistent. Attempting more varied complex sentence structures, such as using subordinate clauses to compare two trends simultaneously, would also help demonstrate greater grammatical control.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.