Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line graph illustrates the information on the number of participants for five different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
To begin with, it is noticeable that the y-axis represents the years and the x- axis represents the number of participants Starting with the first activity which is the musical performance people showed no interest in the year 2000 but initially started showing interest in 2005 and kept increasing a bit year by year . Moving on to the next activity table tennis it started with less than 20% in the year 2000 and reached 20% by the year 2010 and then surged up to more than 50% in the year 2020. Next we have amateur dramatics while it started it rose directly to more than 25% but witnessed a fall plummeted by the year 2020 and not even 10%of people preferred it . Then we have the martial arts and film club . Martial arts experienced fluctuations starting with nearly 38% and being the same in the year 2020.
The last film club recorded the highest figure with directly starting from more than 64%participants preferring and kept changing irregularly .
Overall film club experienced a huge rise while amateur dramatics and musical performance declined a lot .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all five activities and identifies some key trends. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For example, you state the y-axis represents years and the x-axis represents participants, which is factually incorrect based on the graph. Furthermore, your summary of the trends is inconsistent; you mention the film club had the highest figure, but your description of the amateur dramatics trend is confusing and inaccurate. To improve, ensure you carefully interpret the axes and provide a more precise overview of the data points rather than vague descriptions like 'kept changing irregularly'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by a lack of cohesive devices. Many sentences are disjointed, and the transition between ideas is abrupt. For instance, the transition 'Next we have amateur dramatics' is mechanical. The use of referencing is also weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data. To reach a higher band, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'subsequently', 'meanwhile') to connect your ideas more fluidly and improve the logical structure of your paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic verbs like 'started', 'increased', and 'changing'. While you attempt some more descriptive words like 'surged' and 'plummeted', their usage is sometimes contextually awkward or inaccurate given the actual data trends. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'not even 10% of people preferred it', which sounds unnatural in an academic report. Focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'a gradual decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in punctuation and sentence construction. For example, there are missing commas and run-on sentences, such as 'Starting with the first activity which is the musical performance people showed no interest'. Additionally, there are errors in preposition usage and article placement. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focus on proofreading for basic sentence boundaries and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree.
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