Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line bar illustrate data on the attendees for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020
overall, Film club was the highest participants among all activity. Table tennis and musical performances experienced upward trend while Amateur dramatics experienced a downward trend. Although Martial arts experienced a fluctuation, it remained same.
In 2000, Film club initiated their journey with approximately 65 participants. Though it was accounted a slight decrease in 2010, it catch up it started participant in 2020. Martial club participants was around 35 in 2000 and accounted for a fluctuation all the time period between 30 to 40 attendees and ended up same as 35 participants in 2020.
Amateur dramatics demonstrate participants approximately 25 in 2000. Though it increase sightly in 2005 with around 30 participants, it decrease dramatically and ended up with 5 attendees in 2020. Table tennis started with approximately 15 participants and edged up in 2010 with 20 participants afterward its sky rocked along with it crossover Amateur dramatics and Martial arts as well as finished up with roughly 53 participants in 2020. Musical performances demonstrated a increase in every year which start with 0 participant in 2005 and finished with roughly 20 attendees in 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including trends and comparisons. You successfully identified the overall trends for each activity and provided specific data points for 2000 and 2020. However, the overview is slightly weak; while you mention the highest participant group, you could improve by highlighting the most significant shifts (e.g., the dramatic decline in Amateur dramatics versus the growth in Table tennis). The data is generally accurate, though the description of the Martial arts trend as 'remained same' is slightly inaccurate given the fluctuations mentioned. Overall, the response provides a clear summary of the main features as required by the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the data. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Although', 'Though', and 'In 2000', which help the flow of information. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'afterward its sky rocked along with it crossover'. The referencing is generally clear, but the progression between sentences could be smoother to avoid a list-like feel. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different categories of activities.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuation', 'upward trend', and 'downward trend'. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, such as 'sky rocked' (likely meant 'skyrocketed') and 'crossover', though these are used with some inaccuracy. Some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'initiated their journey' or 'demonstrate participants'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise collocation and spelling accuracy to reach a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'The line bar illustrate', 'it catch up it started participant', and 'Musical performances demonstrated a increase'. Punctuation is generally functional, but there are missing articles and awkward phrasing that occasionally distract the reader. While you attempt complex sentences, they are often faulty. Focusing on consistent tense usage and basic sentence construction will help improve your accuracy.
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