Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph demonstrates the details of the individuals for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne city of Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall,at the begining the proportion of participents that were involved in the Film club activity rose dramatically about 65 people were involved in 2000 and 68 were participated in 2020.By contrast there was a gradual decreased in 2005 about 65 were involved in 2005 and in 2010 reain constant.While Material arts participent gradually diminished from 2000 to 2005 .However it started boosted in the number of participents of Material art in 2010.
On the otherhand the figure illustrates the activities like Table tennis and Amateur were sleadily increase between 2000 to 2005 but after that there was a significantly fall of participents in the Amateur activity .Meanwhile number of individuals dramatically rose between 2010 to 2020 about 55 people where involved and this was a high peak activity which significally boost.At the end the worst activity which have 0 participents from 2000 to 2005 but in 2015 there was rose of participents musical performances and gradually increase d and had participents in the end the year 2020 about 15 participents were involved.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, but the information is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the description of the Film club is contradictory, stating it rose dramatically while citing figures that show minimal change. Furthermore, the data for 'Material arts' and 'Amateur' activities is described in a way that is difficult to follow and does not clearly reflect the trends shown in the graph. The overview is weak, as it fails to provide a clear summary of the most significant trends. To improve, focus on identifying the highest and lowest points and the most obvious overall movements, ensuring the data cited matches the visual information provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear referencing and awkward phrasing. While some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'By contrast', and 'Meanwhile' are used, they are often placed incorrectly or do not accurately reflect the relationship between the ideas. The lack of clear sentence boundaries and the repetitive structure make the text difficult to follow. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that cohesive devices are used to link ideas logically rather than just acting as sentence starters.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'participents' (participants), 'Material arts' (Martial arts), 'sleadily' (steadily), and 'significally' (significantly). The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'the worst activity which have 0 participents'. While the meaning is generally discernible, the lack of precision and the repeated spelling errors hinder the overall quality of the writing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise verbs for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('there was a gradual decreased'), subject-verb agreement errors ('the worst activity which have'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. While the meaning is usually clear, the high frequency of errors makes the text feel unpolished. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that tenses are used consistently when describing past data.
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