Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph depicts data on the number of members who partook in various activities at one social center located in Melbourne Australia from 2000 till 2020.

Overall, there were five different activities (film club, martial art, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances) for participants to partake in. However, the film club recorded the highest number of participants in the year 2000 and maintained its highest position up till 2020.

The film club accounted for more than 60 members recording the highest number of participants, it fell slightly in 2005 and 2010, however the members gradually increased over the years reaching almost 70 members. In contrast, musical performances was not in existence in the year 2000, however, they began their club in 2005 and had the least number of members, surprisingly, the number of members grew gradually and reached its peak in 2020 recording 15 members.

Amateur dramatics were at 25 members in 2000 and reached its peak in 2005, however, the numbers fell drastically and ended up at 5 members in 2020, recording the least number of members. Martial arts began with 35 members in 2000, it experienced slight fluctuation and ended up in 2020 with the same number of members it started with. Lastly, the table tennis club. It began with the lowest number of members in 2000 at 15 members, however, it experienced a dramatic increase and ended up taking the second place in the highest number of members in 2020 recording higher than 50 members.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You have successfully identified the highest and lowest points and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the rise of table tennis and the decline of amateur dramatics. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the main trends. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with absolute precision; for instance, you mention 'higher than 50 members' for table tennis, but a more precise estimate based on the graph would be beneficial. Overall, the response is well-focused and meets the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group the information by activity. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'however', and 'lastly' to link your points. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by grouping the activities more strategically (e.g., those that increased vs. those that decreased). Referencing is generally clear, though some sentences could be tightened to improve the flow between the data points and the analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuation', 'dramatic increase', and 'recorded the highest number'. There is an attempt to use less common vocabulary, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'they began their club' (referring to musical performances) and 'partook in', which is slightly formal/stilted in this context. The vocabulary is adequate to convey the information clearly, but more precise and varied reporting verbs would elevate the response further.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are accurate, there are some grammatical slips, such as comma splices (e.g., 'The film club accounted for more than 60 members recording the highest number of participants, it fell slightly...') and minor errors in subject-verb agreement or article usage. The use of complex structures is evident, but they are not always error-free. To improve, focus on punctuation—specifically avoiding run-on sentences—and ensuring that subordinate clauses are correctly attached to main clauses. Despite these errors, communication is never impeded.

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