Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates number of people in Melbourne in Australia who took part in different activities in a social center between two decades from [redacted phone].
Overall, participants rose significantly for physical activities like table tennis whereas musical performances also saw a gradual rise in the number of participants between the two decades . However amateur dramatics saw a steep fall in people taking part in these activities.
From the year [redacted phone], activities like film club and table tennis remained relatively stable, with film club going from above 60 members to just below 60 in 2010 whereas table tennis went from approximately 16 members to just under 20 participants .Alongside martial arts as participants rose from approximately 30 in 2005 to now being closer to 40 in 2010. Musical performances however saw a significant increase from no members to 10 in this time period . On the contrary, amateur dramatics saw a rapid fall in number of participants from being closer to 25 to approximately 15 members .
From the years that followed from [redacted phone], film club had an overall increase in participants from approximately 62 to members being closer to 68. Table tennis saw a massive surge in participants from being under 20 to now being just above 50 which was also the highest net increase in participants in this decade . Conversely amateur dramatics continued to suffer a steep fall as their participants fell to approximately just 5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for the different activities. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the surge in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview could be more concise and integrated. While you mention the main features, some of the data reporting is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends without listing too many specific figures, which are better suited for the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on different time periods. The progression of ideas is clear, and you use cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'however', 'on the contrary', and 'conversely' to link your points. While the paragraphing is appropriate, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. To improve, try to vary the way you introduce comparisons between the activities to make the flow feel more natural and less like a list of data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'steep fall', 'gradual rise', 'massive surge', and 'relatively stable'. These are appropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. There are occasional minor errors in collocation, such as 'number of people in Melbourne in Australia', which could be phrased more naturally. You have used some less common items effectively, but further precision in describing the magnitude of changes would enhance the quality of your lexical choices.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are some grammatical slips, such as missing articles ('illustrates number of people') and minor punctuation issues. The sentence 'Alongside martial arts as participants rose...' is a fragment and lacks a clear subject-verb connection. To achieve a higher band, focus on ensuring that all sentences are complete and grammatically sound, and try to incorporate a wider variety of complex structures with greater accuracy.
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