Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line bar illustrates data on the attendees for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, the Film Club had the highest number of participants among all the activities. Table tennis and musical performances experienced an upward trend, while Amateur Dramatics experienced a downward trend. Although Martial Arts experienced fluctuations, it remained the same.

In 2000, the Film Club initiated its journey with approximately 65 participants. Though it accounted for a slight decrease in 2010, it caught up with its starting number of participants in 2020. Martial Arts participants were around 35 in 2000 and accounted for fluctuations throughout the whole period, between 30 and 40 attendees, and ended up at the same figure of 35 participants in 2020.

Amateur Dramatics demonstrated approximately 25 participants in 2000. Though it increased slightly in 2005 to around 30 participants, it decreased dramatically and ended up with 5 attendees in 2020. Table tennis started with approximately 15 participants and edged up to 20 participants in 2010. Afterward, it skyrocketed, crossing over Amateur Dramatics and Martial Arts, as well as finishing with roughly 53 participants in 2020. Musical performances demonstrated an increase every year, which started with 0 participants in 2005 and finished with roughly 20 attendees in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response effectively identifies the main trends and provides a clear overview. You successfully highlighted the key features, such as the Film Club's dominance and the contrasting trends of Table Tennis and Amateur Dramatics. The data is accurately reported, and comparisons are made where relevant, such as noting when Table Tennis crossed other activities. To reach a higher band, ensure that the 'overview' paragraph is more distinct and perhaps slightly more analytical regarding the overall shifts across the 20-year period. You have covered all parts of the task well, providing a logical summary of the provided graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is well-organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the data, which makes the information easy to follow. You use cohesive devices like 'Although', 'Though', and 'Afterward' effectively to link sentences. The paragraphing is logical, moving from an introduction and overview to detailed body paragraphs. To improve further, ensure that the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is seamless and that you avoid slightly repetitive sentence structures when introducing new data points.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'skyrocketed', 'edged up', and 'accounted for'. This shows an ability to use less common lexical items with some awareness of style. There are occasional minor inaccuracies, such as 'accounted for a slight decrease' (where 'showed' or 'experienced' would be more natural) and 'line bar' (which is a contradiction; it is a line graph). However, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey precise meaning throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. Most sentences are error-free, and your control of grammar is generally strong. There are a few minor slips, such as 'it accounted for a slight decrease' (which is slightly awkward phrasing) and the initial description of the graph as a 'line bar'. However, these errors are infrequent and do not impede communication. The use of past tense to describe the historical data is consistent and accurate throughout the report.

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