Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the data about the participants of five different pursuits at a communal area in Melbourne, Australia, from 2000 to 2020.
Overall,Among these five activities,film club had major participants while ameture dramatics lost their players and it showed the least popularity for the final year.
To begin with,film club had the highest number of participants in 2020,which was just over 60,this number was equal after the 20 years but there was a gradual decline in 2010. Moreover,the number of people who were interested in martial arts accounted between 30 to 40 players over the time but there was some noticeable fluctuation.
Furthermore,tabble tennis had around 16 panticipants in the first year .Subsequently ,this figure was increased and 20 in 2010 and this trend was hapenned by the next following years and contituted at just 50 players in the last year.In addition ,there was a gradual increase in level of participants in ameture dramatic for the 5 years 2000,while this proportion gradually decreased and just about 6 members in 2020.
However,musical perfomance is the one sector,the growth of number of participants begun from 2005 then it showed consistent rise over the time,by roughly 20 people in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all five activities and provides a clear overview. However, the reporting of data is sometimes inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state the film club was 'equal after the 20 years' but then mention a decline, which is contradictory. Additionally, the description of martial arts as '30 to 40' is vague, and the timeline for amateur dramatics is misread (the graph shows a peak, not a steady increase for 5 years). While the main features are identified, the lack of precision in data reporting prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused. Phrases like 'this trend was hapenned by the next following years' are awkward and impede the flow. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the overall progression of information lacks sophistication. While the paragraphing is logical, the internal cohesion within sentences needs significant improvement to reach a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'ameture', 'tabble', 'panticipants', 'hapenned', 'contituted', 'perfomance'). These errors are noticeable and detract from the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. You have attempted to use some descriptive language, but the range is limited, and the word choices are occasionally imprecise or non-standard, such as 'pursuits' or 'communal area' in this specific context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. Punctuation is frequently problematic, with missing spaces after commas (e.g., '2020,which', '2010.Moreover'). There are also grammatical errors in verb tense and agreement, such as 'growth... begun' and 'this trend was hapenned'. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of grammatical and punctuation errors limits the score. You should focus on proofreading for basic sentence construction and punctuation rules.
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