Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the data about the participants of five different pursuits at a communal area in Melbourne, Australia, from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, Among these five activities, film club had major participants while ameture dramatics lost their players and it showed the least popularity for the final year.

To begin with, film club had the highest number of participants in 2020,which was just over 60,this number was equal after the 20 years but there was a gradual decline in 2010. Moreover,the number of people who were interested in martial arts accounted between 30 to 40 players over the time but there was some noticeable fluctuation.

Furthermore,tabble tennis had around 16 panticipants in the first year .Subsequently ,this figure was increased and 20 in 2010 and this trend was hapenned by the next following years and contituted at just 50 players in the last year.In addition ,there was a gradual increase in level of participants in ameture dramatic for the 5 years 2000,while this proportion gradually decreased and just about 6 members in 2020.

However,musical perfomance is the one sector,the growth of number of participants begun from 2005 then it showed consistent rise over the time,by roughly 20 people in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the graph and provided a clear overview. You covered all five activities and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the film club's dominance and the decline of amateur dramatics. However, some data points are slightly inaccurate or vague, such as stating the film club was 'equal after 20 years' when the graph shows a clear fluctuation. Additionally, the description of the amateur dramatics trend is slightly confusing regarding the timeframe. To improve, ensure you precisely describe the start and end points of the trends and avoid vague phrasing like 'this trend was happened'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific activities. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' to guide the reader. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For instance, the transition between the film club and martial arts is a bit abrupt. The use of referencing is generally clear, but the paragraphing could be more balanced to ensure a smoother progression of information throughout the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuation', 'proportion', and 'consistent rise'. However, there are several spelling errors ('ameture', 'tabble', 'panticipants', 'perfomance', 'hapenned', 'contituted') and some awkward word choices, such as 'major participants' instead of 'the highest number of participants'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points. To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and using more precise collocations to describe statistical trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses, article usage, and punctuation. For example, 'this trend was happened' is grammatically incorrect, and there are missing spaces after commas throughout the text. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall fluency of the writing. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing past data, and ensure your punctuation follows standard conventions.

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