Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line chart provides information about the numbers of people participate in various activities at one social center in melbourne, Australia over the period from 2000 to 2020.
overall,it can be seen that table tennis and musical performances members significantly increased over the period.while others experienced fluctuations over the time.
Participants show large interest in table tennis,whose numbers sharply increased from around 15 participants to approximately 20 participants in 2010 and peaked at abover 55 participants by 2020.Followed by Musical performances,started in 2005 from
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the ability to fully address the task. Because the text is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, it fails to report on all the main features of the graph or provide a comprehensive summary. While the introduction and overview attempt to identify trends, the lack of development and the failure to complete the description of the data mean that the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must ensure you cover all categories shown in the graph and provide a full analysis of the trends and comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some attempt at logical organization with an introduction and an overview. However, the abrupt ending and the lack of a full body paragraph structure make it difficult to assess the overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic manner (e.g., 'overall', 'while'), but the lack of sufficient content prevents the development of a coherent flow. Paragraphing is present but ineffective due to the incomplete nature of the text. To improve, focus on structuring your response into clear paragraphs that group related data points together.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but remains quite limited and repetitive. Phrases such as 'numbers of people participate' and 'large interest' are functional but lack the precision expected in an academic report. There are also errors in capitalization (e.g., 'melbourne') and minor inaccuracies in word choice. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more varied reporting verbs and nouns related to data trends, such as 'witnessed a surge' or 'experienced a gradual decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'numbers of people participate' (should be 'participating'), 'abover' (spelling error), and punctuation issues such as missing spaces after commas and incorrect capitalization. These errors, combined with the incomplete sentences, hinder the clarity of the writing. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentences are complete and correctly punctuated. Proofreading for basic spelling and capitalization errors is also essential.
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