Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line chart provides information about the numbers of people participate in various activities at one social center in melbourne, Australia over the period from 2000 to 2020.

overall,it can be seen that table tennis and musical performances members significantly increased over the period.while others experienced fluctuations over the time.

Participants show considerable interest in table tennis,whose numbers sharply increased from around 15 participants to approximately 20 participants in 2010 and peaked at abover 55 participants by 2020.This Followed by Musical performances,started in 2005 from 0 attendance to

just under a quarter by 2020.

By contrast,Film club numbers slightly fluctuated in middle of the period falling from above 64 to just below 60,then substantially increased to around 67 by 2020.While amateur dramatics attendance continously dropped from approximately 27 to under 10 and martial arts s

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main trends for most activities, the report is incomplete; the final sentence is cut off mid-thought ('martial arts s'), and the data for some categories is not fully described. To improve, ensure you complete all sentences and provide a more thorough analysis of the data points. The overview is present but lacks sufficient detail to fully satisfy the requirements of a Band 6 or higher, as the incomplete nature of the response prevents a full summary of the information provided in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is a basic attempt at an overview. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete final sentence. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'By contrast' and 'While', but the overall flow is disrupted by the abrupt ending. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear logical structure and that you use linking words more consistently to connect your observations. The lack of a completed conclusion or final summary makes the text feel disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'sharply increased', 'fluctuated', and 'substantially increased'. However, there are errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'participate' instead of 'participating' and 'abover' instead of 'above'. Additionally, the phrase 'just under a quarter' is used to describe musical performance numbers, which is unclear in the context of the graph. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology and ensuring accurate spelling and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Examples include 'numbers of people participate' (should be 'participating'), 'whose numbers sharply increased' (incorrect relative clause usage), and 'This Followed by Musical performances' (missing subject/verb). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentence structures are complete and grammatically sound.

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