Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line chart provides information about the number of people participate in various activities at one social center in melbourne, Australia over the period from 2000 to 2020.
overall,it can be seen that table tennis and musical performances members significantly increased over the period.while others experienced fluctuations over the time.
Participants show considerable interest in table tennis,whose numbers sharply increased from around 15 participants to approximately 20 participants in 2010 and peaked at above 55 participants by 2020.This Followed by Musical performances,started in 2005 from 0 attendance to
just under a quarter by 2020.
By contrast,Film club numbers slightly fluctuated in the middle of the period falling from above 64 to just below 60,then substantially increased to around 67 by 2020.While amateur dramatics attendance continuously dropped from approximately 27 to under 10.Martial arts participation remained sustainable just over 30,regardless of multiple fluctuations throughout the period.Finally it is clear that film club activity remained at top compared with other activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the growth in table tennis and musical performances, as well as the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting; for instance, stating 'just under a quarter' for musical performances is unclear, as the graph shows participant numbers, not percentages. Additionally, the overview is slightly disjointed. To improve, ensure that all data points are accurately interpreted and that the overview clearly synthesizes the most significant trends across the entire period rather than listing them.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'By contrast' and 'Finally', which are effective. However, the use of punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with missing spaces after commas and periods (e.g., 'overall,it', '2020.This'). Furthermore, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is somewhat abrupt. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring standard punctuation will significantly enhance the readability and coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'substantially', and 'participation'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'musical performances members' (should be 'attendance at musical performances') and 'remained sustainable' (which is not the best fit for describing a trend). There are also minor spelling errors like 'melbourne' (which should be capitalized). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary is used in the correct context to describe statistical trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally hinder the flow. Examples include 'the number of people participate' (should be 'participating'), 'whose numbers sharply increased' (referring to the activity rather than the participants), and inconsistent capitalization. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately to improve your control over grammar.
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