Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line chart provides information about the number of people participating in various activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia over the period from 2000 to 2020.
Overall,it can be seen that table tennis and musical performances attendance significantly increased over the period; While others experienced fluctuations over the time.
Participants show considerable interest in table tennis; the numbers sharply increased from around 15 participants to approximately 20 participants in 2010 and peaked at above 55 participants by 2020.This was followed by Musical performances,started in 2005 from 0 attendance to
just under a quarter by 2020.
By contrast,Film club numbers slightly fluctuated in the middle of the period falling from above 64 to just below 60,then substantially increased to around 67 by 2020.While amateur dramatics attendance continuously dropped from approximately 27 to under 10.Martial arts participation remained stable just over 30,regardless of multiple fluctuations throughout the period.Finally it is clear that film club activity remained at the top compared with other activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the growth in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the description of the musical performances is slightly inaccurate; you mentioned 'just under a quarter', which is unclear in the context of the graph's units. Additionally, while you made comparisons, some of the data reporting could be more precise to better highlight the relationships between the activities. Overall, the task is addressed well, but more careful attention to the specific data labels would improve the accuracy of your reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'By contrast' and 'Finally', which help guide the reader. However, the paragraphing is slightly disjointed, and some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The use of referencing is generally clear, but there are minor issues with punctuation and spacing that occasionally disrupt the flow of the text. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more fluidly and ensure that your paragraph structure is balanced.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'significantly increased', and 'substantially'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'just under a quarter', which is not a standard way to describe numerical data on a graph. Additionally, there are some minor spelling and spacing errors (e.g., 'Overall,it' and 'performances,started'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for a higher band score. Expanding your repertoire of reporting verbs and adverbs would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical errors, particularly regarding punctuation and sentence boundaries. For example, 'While others experienced fluctuations over the time' is a sentence fragment when used as you have written it. There are also issues with missing spaces after commas and periods, which affects the overall presentation. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation will help improve your accuracy.
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