Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line chart provides information about the number of people participating in various activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia over the period from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it can be seen that table tennis and musical performances attendance significantly increased over the period, While others experienced fluctuations over the time.
Participants show considerable interest in table tennis; the numbers sharply increased from around 15 participants to approximately 20 participants in 2010 and peaked at above 55 participants by 2020.This was followed by Musical performances,starting in 2005 from 0 attendance to just under a quarter by 2020.
By contrast, Film club numbers slightly fluctuated in the middle of the period falling from above 64 to just below 60, then substantially increased to around 67 by 2020. While amateur dramatics attendance continuously dropped from approximately 27 to under 10. Martial arts participation remained stable just over 30, regardless of multiple fluctuations throughout the period. Finally it is clear that film club activity remained at the top compared with other activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the trends. You successfully identified the main features, such as the growth in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting; for example, you mention musical performances starting at '0' in 2005, but the graph shows a different starting point. Additionally, describing the film club numbers as 'just under a quarter' is confusing as the y-axis represents the number of participants, not a percentage. To improve, ensure that data points are read precisely from the axes and that units of measurement are used correctly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'By contrast,' 'While,' and 'Finally' to link ideas. However, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is slightly abrupt. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the flow within the second body paragraph could be improved by grouping the activities more effectively (e.g., grouping those that increased versus those that decreased). Referencing is generally clear, though the connection between the overview and the specific data points could be more seamless.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuations,' 'substantially increased,' and 'remained stable.' There are some minor issues with word choice, such as 'just under a quarter,' which is not an appropriate way to describe a numerical value on a graph. You also have a few minor errors in punctuation and spacing, such as the missing space after the period in '2020.This.' While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, incorporating more precise academic collocations would elevate the response to a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the grammar is generally accurate, there are some errors that affect the flow, such as the capitalization error in 'While others experienced...' and the missing space after the full stop mentioned previously. There is also a slight misuse of the comma in the overview. The sentence structures are functional, but there is a lack of variety in complex grammatical forms. To reach a higher band, focus on reducing minor punctuation errors and incorporating a wider variety of complex sentence structures with greater precision.
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