Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given line graph compares the number of individuals participating in different co-curricular activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, all the activities experienced substantial growth over the given period. Film club reported the highest figure among all categories, whereas Amateur Dramatics fell to its lowest point.
Turning to details, musical performances witnessed rapid growth from 0 participants till 2005 to almost 16 individuals taking part by 2020. Beginning from 15 individuals in the year 2000 to 20 participants in 2010, table tennis showed a rapid surge by 2020; resulting in more than 50 people volunteering to it. However, Amateur Dramatics registered 26 participants in 2020 which depicted slow growth till the year 2005, resulting in 29 individuals and eventually declined to 5 persons in 2020.
Moving further with details, Martial arts reported decline from 37 participants in 2000 to 32 participants in 2005. However, it regained people's interest in 2010 resulting in 40 participants and eventually resulting in 38 participants by 2020. In comparison, film club stood at 64 participants in 2000 to 66 participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all requirements of the task by identifying main trends and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the overall growth and the specific fluctuations of the activities. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you stated that Amateur Dramatics 'declined to 5 persons in 2020', but the graph shows a different figure. Additionally, the description of the Film Club's trend is slightly imprecise. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are transcribed with absolute precision and that the 'main features' are clearly distinguished from minor details.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Turning to details', 'However', and 'In comparison' helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related information. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. To improve, try to vary the cohesive devices further and ensure that the link between sentences is always natural rather than relying on standard signposting phrases.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'substantial growth', 'rapid surge', and 'registered'. There are some minor issues with collocation and word choice, such as 'volunteering to it' (volunteering for it) and 'regained people's interest' (which is slightly informal). The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, but it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. Expanding your repertoire of reporting verbs and adverbs would enhance the quality of your analysis.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'from 0 participants till 2005' (until 2005) and 'resulted in 40 participants and eventually resulting in' (repetitive use of 'resulting in'). Some phrasing is slightly awkward, which occasionally impacts the flow. To improve, focus on reducing repetitive structures and ensuring correct preposition usage. The majority of your sentences are error-free, which allows for effective communication, but greater control over complex structures is needed for a higher score.
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