Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the information about the count of taking part for variety of activities at single social center in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
It can be clearly seen that the highest count of flim club was inclined by initial year as around 65 whereas, it gradually declined by 60 in 2010 However, it moderately rose by approximately again 65. Followed by this, the second most popular was table tennis which had nearly 18 from 2000 and it still remained from 2005 to 2010 but it observed as steadily increased by 50. Next to this, martial arts was the third highest with number of near about 38 whereas, it showed as fluctuation trend from 2005 to 2020 and reached up to 45.
It can be clearly observed that the number of musical performances was started from 2005 with 0 participation but it increased by only 10 in 2010 Afterthat, it was slightly inclined and reached to 15 until over the period. Lastly, the least count of participate was amateur dramatics who was popular in 2000 but it suddenly dropped by nearly 3 in the end of the year.
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the analysis is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, describing the film club as 'inclined by initial year' is unclear, and the description of table tennis as 'remained from 2005 to 2010' followed by a sudden jump to 50 is confusing. The overview is incomplete, as the final sentence is left unfinished. While you have identified the main trends, the lack of precision in reporting the data and the failure to provide a coherent summary in the final paragraph limit the effectiveness of the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. Phrases like 'Followed by this' and 'Next to this' are used mechanically and do not always connect the ideas logically. The referencing is often unclear; for instance, it is difficult to follow which activity is being described in the second paragraph due to the repetitive and imprecise use of cohesive devices. The lack of a completed overview at the end significantly impacts the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly, which hinders clarity. Examples include 'count of taking part' instead of 'number of participants', 'inclined by' instead of 'started at', and 'least count of participate' instead of 'lowest participation'. There is a reliance on basic, repetitive language, and the word choices often do not accurately reflect the trends shown in the graph. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology for describing data, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede understanding. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('was started', 'was inclined'), misuse of prepositions ('by' instead of 'at'), and awkward sentence structures. The sentence 'it on=bserved as' is incomplete and contains a typo. While you attempt to use a mix of simple and complex structures, the errors are pervasive and affect the clarity of the information being presented. You need to focus on basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement to improve your accuracy.
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