Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line comparison graph show usthe main features comparison of different participants activities at one social centre which i held in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The line grpah consists of two axis on x-axis the year is placed and on y-axis the number of participanr is placed. However, there is a lagend in that graph whih indicates all five lines and there purpose or define them.
The first line Film club shows that the number of participants in every year remains constant also same for martial arts but when we see the amateur drametics then we see that at year 2005 there is a downfall of that activity is start and which is in reulst almost less than ten participents take place at 2020. While the table tennis activity get a boom of participants at the year of 2010 and get almost above fifty participants in 2020 year, and the last one is musical performances which had zero participants at the year of 2005 bur it then increasing and get almost twenty particpants at the year 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify trends for the five activities, the description lacks precision. For instance, stating that participation 'remains constant' for Film Club and Martial Arts is a reasonable observation, but the report on Amateur Dramatics and Table Tennis lacks specific data points to support the trends described. To reach a higher band, you should focus on selecting key data points (e.g., starting and ending values) to illustrate the changes more clearly. The overview is also missing; a summary of the most significant trends (e.g., the overall growth in Table Tennis versus the decline in Amateur Dramatics) is essential for a high score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. Phrases like 'in that graph whih indicates' and 'which is in reulst' are awkward and do not effectively link ideas. The progression of information is somewhat disjointed, as the transition between describing the graph's layout and the actual data is abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic descriptors. There are several spelling errors ('grpah', 'participanr', 'lagend', 'whih', 'drametics', 'reulst', 'particpants') and word choice issues, such as 'get a boom' and 'take place'. These errors occasionally make the text difficult to read. To improve, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'experienced a significant increase', or 'declined steadily'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repeating the same words throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The line comparison graph show', 'the table tennis activity get'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, making them difficult to follow. While you attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty or contain errors that impede communication. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect pluralisation. Practising the use of complex sentences with accurate punctuation will also help increase your score.
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