Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given chart illustrates the number of participants for various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia over the period from 2000 to 2020.
As seen in the graph, Film club has remained at the top in the chart in all the given years, indicating that it was the most preferred activity out all.However, the number of participants was slightly declining from the year 2002 till the year 2010 and touched 60, thereafter, the number participants started increasing, almost reaching 70.The second highest preferred activity by the year 2020 was table tennis with more than 50 participants, which had participants below 20 in the year 2000.From the year 2010 participants in table tennis started rising rapidly.
Furthermore, the number of participants in amateur dramatics fell drastically after the year 2005 and participants were below 10 by 2020.In contrast, number of participants in musical performances was 0 till the year 2005, thereafter, significant increase of over 20 participants in 2020 is noticed.In addition, participants in martial arts showed few ups and downs and remained between 30 to 40 participants,
To conclude, participants increased over the years in various activities such as film club, table tennis, musical performance.Whereas, participants fell in few activities such as amateur dramatics and martial arts.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including trends for the different activities. You successfully identified the most popular activity (Film club) and noted the significant changes in Table tennis and Amateur dramatics. However, the overview is somewhat weak; while you included a concluding summary, a clear overview of the main trends should ideally be placed after the introduction to better highlight the overall patterns. Additionally, some data points could be more precise, such as the description of martial arts, which is a bit vague. Overall, you have addressed the requirements of the task well by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Furthermore', 'In contrast', and 'To conclude', which help guide the reader. However, the use of these devices is sometimes a bit mechanical, and there are instances where punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods (e.g., 'all.However', '60, thereafter'), disrupt the flow of the text. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring consistent spacing would enhance the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'declining', 'rapidly', and 'drastically'. There is an attempt to use less common vocabulary, though some phrasing is slightly repetitive or imprecise, such as 'most preferred activity out all' (should be 'of all'). The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, but to reach a higher band, you should aim for more sophisticated collocations and avoid minor errors in word choice, such as 'number participants' instead of 'number of participants'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, particularly regarding articles (e.g., 'in the year 2002', 'in the year 2010') and missing prepositions. Punctuation is also an issue, with several run-on sentences and missing spaces after full stops. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on sentence boundary control and article usage would significantly improve your accuracy.
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