Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line chart shows the data of how many people took part in differnet activities in Melbourne,Australia in year 2000 to 2020.
As it can be seen from the given graph, there were total 5 various activities.The participants in film club were mostly constant in 2000,2015,2020 with around 65-69 player.In year 2005 and 2010 the number of player were slightly decresed. the film club had highest number of members in all year as compared to other feilds. Martial arts also had flucuations approx 37,30,40,30,35 numbers of player in year 2000,2005,2010,2015,2020 respectivily. The number of participants in Amateur dramatics were around 34 in 2000,inceresed in 2005 by 38 and after 2010 it rapidly fall down by total number of player 20,15 and almost 10 in year 2015,2020 respectivily.
The number of player in table tennis were higher in almost everyyear in year 2010 the number of player in tennis and amaterur were almost same but after that the table tennis players rapdily higher.
In Musical performance participants were constantly added after year 2005.
To pen down, the line graph clear shows the varations came in 2 deceds. Film club always spoted in top rank and the era of Amateur dramatics fads off.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the dominance of the film club and the decline of amateur dramatics. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and relies heavily on listing data points rather than synthesising trends. For example, the description of martial arts as '37, 30, 40, 30, 35' is repetitive and lacks analytical depth. While the overview is present, it is slightly underdeveloped. To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping data to highlight significant trends (e.g., comparing the growth of one activity against the decline of another) rather than reporting each year individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or missing. Transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt, such as the jump from table tennis to musical performance. The concluding sentence is also quite informal ('To pen down') and does not effectively summarise the main trends. Improving the use of linking words like 'consequently,' 'in contrast,' or 'meanwhile' would help the ideas flow more naturally and logically throughout the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'differnet,' 'decresed,' 'flucuations,' and 'rapdily,' which occasionally distract the reader. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic terms like 'higher' or 'added.' To improve, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' 'experienced a downward trend,' or 'surpassed.' Expanding your repertoire of synonyms will help you avoid repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('the number of player were'), missing articles ('in year 2000'), and incorrect preposition usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several missing spaces after commas and periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the overall score. Focusing on proofreading for basic errors like pluralisation and article usage will significantly improve the clarity and professionalism of your writing.
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