Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph give us the information about the people who participates for different activities at a social centre of Melbourne, Australia in 2000 to 2020.
Firstly, In 2000 no one takes part in musical performances Meanwhile, In 2005 a few individuals participates in musical performances which continued increasing and 10 to 12 people involved in this activity which increased a little bit in 2015 although, IN 2020 almost 17 to 19 people participate in this performance.
In 2000, about 17, 18 participants involved in table tennis Meanwhile, the ratio of tennis players increased slowly and reached at 20 players in 2005 which remains almost constant till 2010 Although, In 2015 the number of these players increased steadily and reached at almost 38 to 40 players and the players are almost 50 to 55 in 2020.
Martial arts participants are almost remains the same from 2000 to 2020.
in 2000 there are almost 38 participants of this activity which reduces in 2005 and then again increased in 2010 and then the number decreases a little bit till 2020.
The number of Amateur dramatics participants is standing on 26 to 27 in 2000 and almost remains constant in 2005 it reduces gradually and fallen to 20 and co
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all four activities mentioned in the graph and attempts to highlight trends. However, the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify some key figures, the description of the trends is often imprecise, and the report ends abruptly mid-sentence, which prevents a full overview. To improve, ensure you provide a clear 'overview' paragraph that summarizes the most significant trends (e.g., the overall growth in table tennis versus the relative stability of martial arts) rather than just listing data points. Additionally, ensure you complete your sentences and provide a concluding summary of the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by the repetitive use of 'Meanwhile' and 'In [year]' to start sentences. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as using 'Although' at the start of sentences where it does not fit the context. The abrupt ending of the text significantly impacts the overall coherence, as the final thought is left incomplete. Using a wider variety of linking words like 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', or 'Subsequently' would help improve the flow between ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely heavily on basic verbs like 'increased' and 'participates'. There is also some confusion with word forms, such as 'participants of this activity' instead of 'participants in'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp rise'. Additionally, ensure you use correct collocations, such as 'take part in' rather than 'takes part in' (when referring to the activity).
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The graph give us', 'no one takes part', 'a few individuals participates'). Tense usage is also inconsistent; you often mix present and past tenses when describing data from the past. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and maintaining a consistent tense—usually the past tense—when describing data from a completed period like 2000 to 2020.
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